Friday Fictioneers – Bobby’s Blood

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“Uh-oh, looks like you’ve got quite a mess here, Miss,” the detective said, pointing to the candle. “Shouldn’t let them burn so long.”
She nodded and tried her best to look sad. Good thing the detective couldn’t see what was underneath the wax. Bobby’s blood. But she had done a good job, delicately and intricately drizzling the candle wax over the blood drips stained into the wood.
“Well, you get some sleep, Miss,” the detective said. “We’ll keep looking for Bobby.”
She smiled, trying not to look relieved. Now if only there was a candle big enough to hide the body.

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My story this week is in a genre that I call: Just Finished Watching A Twin Peaks Marathon On Netflix In 2 Days (It’s funny how much influence something like that has).

Friday Fictioneers: a story in 100 words prompted by a photo that Rochelle Wisoff-Fields posts every Wednesday. Photo Credit: ยฉRenee Heath

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27 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Bobby’s Blood

  1. If you can, see Roger Corman’s movie Bucket of Blood. I think it was 1957 or so. Reminds me of that movie, in a way. Now, if he’d been cut up and hidden in candles …
    Creep-fest fun!

    • Oh yeah, Roger Corman movies definitely fit with the twin peak-sy mood I was in when I wrote this. Haven’t seen Bucket of Blood yet, I’ll definitely check it out. I do love a “good” Corman flick every now and then! Thanks for the recommendation!

  2. Finding a candle to hide the body would be quite a feat. I like the feel of this but my suggestion would be to find another way to say “trying her best to look”, as you have it twice in the 100 words. I know it’s not exactly the same, but so close that it sticks out. “Attempting to avoid looking relieved?” “Doing her best not to appear relieved?” Just a couple ideas.

    janet

    • Thank you for the suggestion, Janet. I did write the two sentences purposely repetitive, though I didn’t really have reason to. I did change it up a bit per your suggestion… I’d rather have it read smoother than hold onto something I did for no reason!
      Thank you!!

  3. Rachel, If the Crime Scene Invistigation team in this story is as good as the ones on TV, I doubt if she’s going to get away with this murder. ๐Ÿ™‚ That probably isn’t always the case though. Well written. ๐Ÿ™‚

  4. Great story and loved the ending! She sounds quite devious – I’m sure she’ll find some way to “disappear” the body before the detective becomes suspicious of her.

  5. Ah yes, the old watch something back to back until you don’t know which way is up, effect. Love doing this, when I can! And reading a trilogy, or something like that. Just need coffee & biscuits, or lemonade and Pringles…
    Loved the story. When do we get to find out about the body? ๐Ÿ™‚

  6. Very clever. Reminds me of the HItchcock one where she kills her husband with a frozen leg of lamb and then roasts the murder weapon and feeds it to the police!

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