There are people who aren’t supposed to be in relationships. I’m one of them. I didn’t know that, of course, since everyone thinks single people are weirdo’s. So I got married, so I wouldn’t be a weirdo. A month into it, I knew it was a mistake. I had to escape. I tried to hop a freighter out of town, but they caught me a mile into the desert. They put me in a straight jacket again and threw me in the van. Back at the state hospital, they tell me I’m right, not everyone’s meant to be in a relationship. They say I never was… in a relationship, that is. They say I was never married. But it’s hard to believe them. They’re not married. And it’s hard to believe wierdos.
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A bit experimental this week. I’m taking a writing course and am being challenged to think outside the box. Please let me know what you think; what worked, what didn’t work. Thank you!
Friday Fictioneers: 100 word stories prompted by a picture that Rochelle Wisoff-Fields posts every Wednesday. Around 100 people participate, their stories and poems are brilliant; check them out here.
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I like your outside of the box, it made me think 🙂
Thank you, Helen!
clearly out of the box…Well done!
Thank you 🙂
I like the circular nature of this piece – the narrator is regarded as a weirdo for not being married (in his/her mind, anyway), turns out they’re in a state hospital and they end up regarding the workers there as weirdos for the same reason.
A great look into such a mind, though a little sad. I enjoyed it! Very out of the box 🙂
(“dessert” should be “desert”)
Thank you!!
I think this is very good, Rachel. Because of this person’s mental instability they have been called a weirdo all their life, and have attempted things to make them fit in (become normal). You captured that POV nicely.
Thank you 🙂
supposed to be relationships – I think this sentence needs an “in”
Wow. What a vicious circle. Nicely done. Enjoyed this very much.
Thank you, Alicia!
I like this but from “Back at the state hospital to the end of the story it feels choppy to me. Maybe it’s the punctuation, maybe it’s the sentence structure, maybe its me. I am a weirdo,after all 😉
LOL..def out of the box Rachel..keep it up!
Yeah, it’s choppy. And I think you’re right that different punctuation could help, though I’m not 100% sure what and where to put different punctuation.
Thank you, Dawn!!
I’m not either. We’ll figure it our..eventually…and then…LOOK OUT world! lol
I just adore that circular logic: well done.
Thank you 🙂
It all makes sense really. 🙂 Clever one.
Thank you, Sandra!
Cleverly done. I liked it. Weirdos doesn’t need an apostrophe.
You’re right, thank you!
No worries. 🙂
Very good piece. I liked it.
But of course, I am married and a wierdo. Some things do go well together.
Now as far as this asylum goes….
(keep experimenting. It’s fun and stretches that mental muscle and writing skills).
Randy
Thank you so much, weirdo Randy 🙂
Dear Rachel,
Good for you stepping outside the box or the straight jacket as it were. 😉 I’m not sure who was the true weirdo in your story or what really happened. I liked it nonetheless.
Shalom,
Rochelle
ooh, out of the box but I like it; it works and I’d be interested to see a longer story from this narrator’s POV
I like the circular flow of the story and I like the idea of who’s regarding who a weirdo. Keep up the good work.